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My Prayer

Author: Dawnyd
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Just something I wrote down it just came out. It may not be good so just let me know what you think.

My Prayer

I love you Lord up above, because of you I know love
If only the world could see, with you Lord, how great life can be
For our sins, you suffered so much, how blessed we are from your touch
You are the great one there is no doubt, because of you, there's so much to learn about
I will love you until the day I die, and there is no reason to question why
Without you Lord how sad the world would be, because of you how blessed are we

Submitted on 2005-09-21 07:57:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  your faith and belief burts out of this poem at a million miles an hour. All I can do is applaud you for that. It was a very good write, written with faith and love because of faith and love.
| Posted on 2005-09-21 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]
  dear dawnyd i really like your poem amen to that. :) :) some people dont know that without god theres no way. iam really feelin your poem
| Posted on 2005-09-21 00:00:00 | by latrice | [ Reply to This ]

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