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Author: mysteryed
ASL Info:    44/male/california/usa
Elite Ratio:    3.29 - 20 /35 /18
Words: 126
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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to the search of ones self, and I hope you like what you find.

I am the eternal darkness,
Evil and full of spite,
I have traveled far to his domain,
To meet this one called light,
When its me that I see,
Or is it he, who is me,
Then I realize, its not us,
For we are one,
Two separate halves,
Of a single persona,
In conflict,
Like the night,
And the sun.

By mysteryed

Author's Comments:
"most of my poems come from life, my life, each is a part of me that gives me a new understanding of myself, I am now at peace with who I am."

Submitted on 2005-09-21 08:56:41     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Interesting, sort of intellectual( did I spell that right?). If it were me, I would have made it more colorful, given it some riddle like twists to boggle the mind, but it was nicely done. It got a little confusing with the ' me that I see, or is it he, who is me' stuff, and I might try to untangle that a little if I were you ( or if you were me, and he were she , and I was me that was you, and you were you that was me, and on, and on...).
| Posted on 2005-09-21 00:00:00 | by Jeniffer | [ Reply to This ]

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