Lusting for You.

Author: Childoutspoken ASL Info:    21/F Elite Ratio:    3.73 - 340 /440 /126 Words: 110

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Lusting for You.

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You're standing there so nonchalant as you talk to your friends and I watch your eyes as they sweep across every face to mine You pause slightly a smile lighting up your face but only momentarily before you look away a light sigh parts longing lips and dark brown eyes slide closed to imagine your hands on the hips pulling me closer to you as your lips embrace mine with a grace the body has never known your fingertips light on my pale cheek the warmth and pressure of you so tangible against my willing, eager frame there is nothing I wouldn't give to be with you again

Submitted on 2005-09-21 09:27:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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Amazing way to desribe what you're feeling. I thought it to be like a movie clip. Great descriptions, by the way. It's weird not to think of it as freaky or stalkerish, and then where they wanted to be with them again...yeah that made it all better. I could relate so well. Bravo, bravo.

| Posted on 2005-09-22 00:00:00 | by misleadxmyheart | [ Reply to This ]

Wonderful description of the passion of being with that certain someone. A vivid image of that "look" across a crowded room. The way you watch him move and talk.. and then as he catches your eye.. and the daydreaming as you close your eyes to bring him even closer. The sensual image of his touch, and the feeling you get from it. Very nice! ~Sandra

| Posted on 2005-09-22 00:00:00 | by Intricate1 | [ Reply to This ]

anouther difference: robert and i never kissed... DAMNIT! this one makes me see that to be so physcal with someone like that and then just not be all the sudden is kinda like... druuuugs maaan. you want it so bad, but you cant get it. this makes me accually glad that robert and i never were physical with eachouther. -natalie michelle

| Posted on 2005-09-21 00:00:00 | by The Blue Panda | [ Reply to This ]

Wow! nice job my dear fellow writer. I agree with treybur because I'm too consider it a pure piece not animalistic. I love your style of addressing this lucky man. I really like this part " a light sigh parts longing lips and dark brown eyes slide closed to imagine your hands on the hips pulling me closer to you as your lips embrace mine with a grace the body has never known your fingertips light on my pale cheek the warmth and pressure of you... " You did great in describing this wonderful scene. Well done... Its a well-written piece of art.

| Posted on 2005-09-21 00:00:00 | by Khaled AbdAllah | [ Reply to This ]

DAMN THAT'S HOT! wow, um, wow. i'm totally impressed! i can't put my finger on it, but even though the title claims "lust", this piece seems deeper than that to me (i hate the word "deep", and never use it, so congrats). this poem is beautiful, not animalistic, at least the way i read it. maybe that says more about the reader, since i'm sure there will be those on here who say "oh yeah, i love fu(king and lust and all that good stuff"...well to them i say "take your penicillin". anyway, i think your words are beautiful and have an air of purity in them. daddy like.

| Posted on 2005-09-21 00:00:00 | by treybur | [ Reply to This ]

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