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    dots Submission Name: Liesdots

    Author: luvy
    ASL Info:    19/F/AZ
    Elite Ratio:    4.45 - 270/168/35
    Words: 100
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    There i am

    sinking in an ocean of lies

    I keep swimming to the edge of truth

    Its keeps getting farther and farther away

    15 years ive been swimming

    when it seems that ive finally gotten there

    when ive scratched the surface

    when i see what truth can be

    when i see how it can set me free

    A new spring of lies erupts around me

    It creates a whirlwind of confusion and pain

    When all this shit surrounds me how am i suppose to have personal gain

    Submitted on 2005-09-21 15:55:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      u fight to find that personal gain
    because ur struggle's
    the only thing keeping u sane
    so u remain fighting evil feelings remain
    just keep ur head high
    u'll always be a black queen in my eyes
    | Posted on 2005-10-05 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
      this is a really nice poem i like it because i can relate to it i think that behind something good theres always something bad behind it.
    | Posted on 2005-09-21 00:00:00 | by latrice | [ Reply to This ]
      hihi! anyway i love this poem! ive already read it when u rread it to me and troy! he is a damn good rapper! anyway imma go now! ive already told u how i feel about this!
    | Posted on 2005-09-21 00:00:00 | by iluvpoetry_1 | [ Reply to This ]

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