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    dots Submission Name: The Noise Part Threedots
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    Author: josymanthegreat
    ASL Info:    21/m/GA from Puerto Rico
    Elite Ratio:    4.73 - 337/364/104
    Words: 226
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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    Description:
       This is what happened before the last noise... thought I had put it up already sorry... This shall be called the noise three... Please read the first two before this one and itll make perfect sense


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    dotsThe Noise Part Threedots
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    As the noise rang louder,
    I walked out walking faster and faster,
    Now my eyes didnt have fear,
    I could see everything but nothing was clear,

    Walked got a flash of steel,
    The moment was so unreal,
    I walked out the house,
    the noise still hanging in my ear

    "kill, torment, slash, torture",
    The noise wasnt just a sound anymore,
    It was a cry from inside my mind,
    to let all of the anger go

    Stepped to the neighbors door,
    tapped so lightly at it,
    and when I got the answer,
    took advantage about it

    Tied him up on a chair,
    my eyes met his with hate,
    and as I stuffed his mouth,
    I knew he felt my pain

    Everytime the knife slashed a finger,
    a slight yell would escape,
    but It was great for me,
    to get rid of my pain

    "Didn't have anything else to do,
    he had already seen my face",
    thats what the noise spoke of,
    thats what the noise said

    So I went ahead and let him feel,
    how in the inside I felt,
    left his body bloody and motionless,
    He felt the death of my pain

    Went back to my house got back in my bed,
    and in the night i just drowsed off,
    The noise of my pain




    Submitted on 2005-09-22 05:35:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Wow. ...Definitely didnt see that coming. "Powerful" is an understatement. I've never read anything like it. I'm not sure what to say now... I'm only speechless when somethings too good to be decscribed by words...

    -nikkki
    | Posted on 2005-10-04 00:00:00 | by Liv2LoveThePain | [ Reply to This ]
      WOAH NELLY! this rocked my world..like twice! this is the best stuff! ima stalk you... and...i got to go to bed... i anna rewad all your poems...this is so kol!

    XxXSuicidalxxchildXxX
    | Posted on 2005-09-22 00:00:00 | by Suicidalchild51 | [ Reply to This ]
      quite interesting...didnt quite get it but at first with the pt 1 but now i get it...its just all in ur head. its unique i guess. good write...happy birthday by the way ;)
    | Posted on 2005-09-22 00:00:00 | by lil_gh0st_girl | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow! This was quite unexpected! I didnt imagine that the noise would actually be just in your mind! This part 3 totally elaborates on the last two parts of this story and a great element of surprise here to find out what the noise is! That is really very good indeed! Lots of times these can be somewhat predictable but not in this case and that is awesome! My only question is just a curious one as to why you posted this one last and the final ending before this one? I almost read that one before this one but caught it reading your description. This part 3 picks up nicely where part 2 leaves off. Form is very good and this is a nice addition to the rest of the story. On to the last part!

    Lorna
    | Posted on 2005-09-22 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]


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