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    dots Submission Name: Ifdots

    Author: Raivn
    ASL Info:    33/f/al
    Elite Ratio:    4.28 - 1222/916/231
    Words: 247
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       This is pre-Tony poetry. I was slightly more optimistic back then. It was written back in 2001, so bear with me, and let me know what you think.

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    If dreams were wishes,
    And wishes came true
    My nights would be filled
    With dreams of you.

    If smiles were certain
    And tongues could not lie,
    I would understand you
    When I look into your eyes.

    If words were undeniable
    And sentiments were real,
    I could hear what you're saying to me
    And understand how you feel.

    If I could trust my heart
    And you were true,
    I could put inhibitions aside
    And open up to you.

    If good things happened
    Every time I wished on a star,
    I could be happy.
    I'd be where you are.

    If the world was not so cruel,
    I could love you as I should.
    If everyone accepted God,
    Everything would be for the good.

    If the sun would always shine,
    And the moon would always glow,
    And you could always look at the stars,
    And the people you love would never go...

    If thunder wasn't so loud,
    And you could touch the sky,
    And dreams would always come true,
    And flowers would never die...

    If the people you loved stayed with you,
    And would never, ever leave.
    If people weren't so selfish,
    And could give rather than receive...

    If everything was perfect,
    And no one ever lied,
    And I could always love you,
    And people never died...

    Then I could understand my heart,
    And I could love you
    And the stars would shine
    And all my dreams would come true.

    Submitted on 2005-09-22 09:39:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Don’t you just LOVE your older “optimistic” poems? I kno I do! I look back at myne and go- “huh. So that’s what it used to be lyke…” And maybe it’s just the frame of mynd that has been built for me but, my optimistic shyte… Me no lykey. I feel it’s awful and does not speak my voice anymore. Youkno? Thys is good though. Dig the flow. I’m still never crazy about happi or optimistic. But longing is good! And dreams too. So you make it work- still. Old still works for you- congrats!

    Peace, love and rabbits on hella drugs-

    | Posted on 2005-09-23 00:00:00 | by Six_Grey | [ Reply to This ]
      That should seriously be publishled it's very cool. "IF" is the most powerful word that never is. It is said before and it is said after but it never is itself the thing mentioned.
    | Posted on 2005-09-22 00:00:00 | by alittlebithippy | [ Reply to This ]

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