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    dots Submission Name: I Need To Knowdots
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    Author: Raivn
    ASL Info:    33/f/al
    Elite Ratio:    4.28 - 1222/916/231
    Words: 149
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 627
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    Bytes: 866



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    dotsI Need To Knowdots
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    I need to know if you were real,
    Because you look just like a dream
    Of a man that loved me unconditionally,
    And filled those spaces in between.
    I need to know if you can feel,
    Because I feel only pain.
    Does your heart beat for someone else,
    Why won't mine do the same?
    I need to know if we are here
    Because I feel like I'm dreaming again.
    You looked at me like I was real.
    You pressed a kiss to my skin.
    I need to know if I'm still "safe."
    If that's all I'm ever meant to be.
    You once said that's why you fell in love,
    You could safely give your heart to me.
    I need to know if you were real.
    I need to know if you are whole.
    I need to know why I'm still here.
    I need for you to let me go.




    Submitted on 2005-09-22 09:46:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i like the way you dwindled between the idea of real and fiction or in ur case the dream, nice transition between 2 situation that are similar and hence can be interchanged... good job!
    | Posted on 2005-09-26 00:00:00 | by ax2x3m | [ Reply to This ]
      that was wonderfull and it told a great story. I loved the way when you ryhmed it didn't seem as if you tried to ryhme just as if you heart was in it. But again i love the poem and i hope you post more.
    | Posted on 2005-09-22 00:00:00 | by Poeticprincess | [ Reply to This ]


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