For one I think It needs a title but I guess I don't really know what to call it either. It started out really amazing and kinda went blah... A poem with a strong beginning needs a stronger ending. It's kinda confusing the way you say
"The tender kiss You place on my lips The way I ache when we're apart" It's really cdonfusing because are you saying If you could see that? or does it come out of no where?
I feel like you didn't spend much time on it at all but It also seems like you are a good writer you just might have to put more effort into it. But I really do like the first stanza
And I think it would be better it you went into another stanza at the end to round it all off but that also feeds into the whole stronger ending thing but this is just my opinion.