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    dots Submission Name: Hopefully Your'sdots

    Author: toyysruss
    Elite Ratio:    4.2 - 494/336/134
    Words: 165
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsHopefully Your'sdots

    a glimmer of hope,is that what i see?
    and that truly means,im not watching t.v.
    cause that would mean,the hope was a lie
    it was just a really clever disguise

    where is this hope,i've heard so much about
    the agonies to much,and the price is stout
    for being disapointed everyday of my life
    and being disapointed with my life will suffice
    for me i'd say you have to agree,
    for me i'd say you wouldn't want to be

    it gets bad,when you hope for some Hope
    and i really trully Hopefully you don't
    ever run out of it,the feeling is not really meant,to be felt by anyone
    sometimes fellings of comming undone
    is what i have become

    what have i become,hopeless
    what have i become,dopeless
    what have you become
    done for some
    what have i become
    Dumb for some

    never become someones hopefully your's
    for this
    there is no cure

    Submitted on 2005-09-22 18:40:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      First off, thank you for the comments on my writing.

    Second, I liked this a lot. Rhyming is usually something I don't like because it disturbs the natural flow of the writing, but here it actually seems to help it along. Despite the fact that I couldn't really relate this to myself in any way, I enjoyed it, and think it's (hopefully) a good sign for your other works.
    | Posted on 2006-01-16 00:00:00 | by Trifecta | [ Reply to This ]
      i liked this very much. i read your other poem (my name's we, i think) and i thought it was good too. you're a very talented person, don't ever doubt that. i hope to read more of your work. moo!
    | Posted on 2005-09-22 00:00:00 | by m with two i_s | [ Reply to This ]
      i also know how your feeling i have benn through times when i couldnt stand being who i was and i thought there was no hope for me and my life wouldnt never get better. i liked the way you managed to capture that in this poem.

    | Posted on 2005-09-22 00:00:00 | by luvy | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked it...it was unique and different than alot I read. I really connected tp ur lines and know how ur feeling.
    hope u feel happier soon.
    take care!
    | Posted on 2005-09-22 00:00:00 | by silent_death12 | [ Reply to This ]

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