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Hopefully Your's

Author: toyysruss
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Hopefully Your's

a glimmer of hope,is that what i see?
and that truly means,im not watching t.v.
cause that would mean,the hope was a lie
it was just a really clever disguise

where is this hope,i've heard so much about
the agonies to much,and the price is stout
for being disapointed everyday of my life
and being disapointed with my life will suffice
for me i'd say you have to agree,
for me i'd say you wouldn't want to be

it gets bad,when you hope for some Hope
and i really trully Hopefully you don't
ever run out of it,the feeling is not really meant,to be felt by anyone
sometimes fellings of comming undone
is what i have become

what have i become,hopeless
what have i become,dopeless
what have you become
done for some
what have i become
Dumb for some

never become someones hopefully your's
for this
there is no cure

Submitted on 2005-09-22 18:40:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  First off, thank you for the comments on my writing.

Second, I liked this a lot. Rhyming is usually something I don't like because it disturbs the natural flow of the writing, but here it actually seems to help it along. Despite the fact that I couldn't really relate this to myself in any way, I enjoyed it, and think it's (hopefully) a good sign for your other works.
| Posted on 2006-01-16 00:00:00 | by Trifecta | [ Reply to This ]
  i liked this very much. i read your other poem (my name's we, i think) and i thought it was good too. you're a very talented person, don't ever doubt that. i hope to read more of your work. moo!
| Posted on 2005-09-22 00:00:00 | by m with two i_s | [ Reply to This ]
  i also know how your feeling i have benn through times when i couldnt stand being who i was and i thought there was no hope for me and my life wouldnt never get better. i liked the way you managed to capture that in this poem.

| Posted on 2005-09-22 00:00:00 | by luvy | [ Reply to This ]
  I liked was unique and different than alot I read. I really connected tp ur lines and know how ur feeling.
hope u feel happier soon.
take care!
| Posted on 2005-09-22 00:00:00 | by silent_death12 | [ Reply to This ]

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