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    dots Submission Name: Secrets Left Unspokendots
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    Author: HurtDeepDown
    ASL Info:    24/F/OHIO
    Elite Ratio:    4.2 - 165/161/42
    Words: 87
    Class/Type: Poetry/Friendship
    Total Views: 764
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       Wow, haven't written on here in forever. Just wrote this yesterday in the middle of a boring Accounting class. I was kind of thinking about a secret I had just told my best friend Rach and came up with something. I'm odd...anyways, leave your thoughts.


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    dotsSecrets Left Unspokendots
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    Hold it inside tightly,
    don't let it in the air,
    softly keep these secrets inward,
    or tell them if you dare.

    Carry it forever,
    never slip it by mistake,
    shut it off forever,
    so people never hear my ache.

    Please heal this evil pressure,
    don't let them get to you,
    reason it out softly,
    without yelling out the truth.

    When I'm ready I will tell them,
    please don't let it show,
    I'm not ready for the pressure,
    it's too hard to let it go.




    Submitted on 2005-09-22 19:38:26     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Keeping secrets can be torture sometimes...but then, so can telling them. This poem seems to have deep meaning behind it that I guess only you know.. but I like the way you expressed your feelings about it.. and the way you brought it out.

    Nice work!
    ~Sandra
    | Posted on 2005-10-12 00:00:00 | by Intricate1 | [ Reply to This ]
      There was such a raw power when I first read this
    and then wondered if for consistency it was written out using the second person "you" instead of the first person "I" as an alternative reading....
    That gave me a different impact again....
    the last line just wraps the whole in a very tight and intense synopsis..... such inner struggle....
    thanks for sharing.
    | Posted on 2005-10-11 00:00:00 | by arkayye | [ Reply to This ]
      wow now this poem i can definately relate to
    i am one person who held in years and years of emotional turmiol finally like a rocket it sprang forth from me
    there was no more room to hide the pain
    know that letting it escape is the best thing that ever happenend to me
    i now no longer let pain stay with me its where my quote to evrey negative there is a positive came from

    keep in touch as your poetry moves me
    if you want someone to talk to just comment me


    Take Care
    Ron
    | Posted on 2005-10-11 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      It kind of changes person views from here to there, but it makes it fun and "mysterious". Greatly done, by the way. It changes direction, too. Yet I can relate. You want to tell someone so badly, but are scared of the consequences if they would happen to let it slip. Great work !
    | Posted on 2005-09-22 00:00:00 | by misleadxmyheart | [ Reply to This ]


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