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    dots Submission Name: that memorable shitdots

    Author: maninthemirror
    ASL Info:    17/m/arkansas
    Elite Ratio:    2.64 - 224/318/109
    Words: 144
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Serious
    Total Views: 680
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 860

       I'm not sure what I named it that....its just a title that came to me.....hope you like it

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    dotsthat memorable shitdots

    I wanna leave a seed in your mind/
    and when I leave you behind/
    your thinkin' Gee he can rhyme/
    no stems and seeds, I'll be fine/
    When I die I wanna live/
    deep in the soul of my kids/
    And just maybe, you gonna say/
    I was stupid for hating him anyway/
    I promise from now on/
    no matter the place or or the time/
    I"ll rap the best I can/
    from long detroit, to compton/
    do you understand man/

    and when I rap I'll spit ice/
    my own soul I"ll sacrifice/
    got the extensive understanding what it is to be, /
    me, my love, my soul /
    my blood I'll role/
    with you holla at me if you need me/
    to you I'll never be decieving/
    I got your back like prozak/
    you got me when you need me/

    Submitted on 2005-09-22 20:19:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Waz up man, it me agian, this is one of your best raps. I love this [censored]. You getting better. Much better than that first rap we wrote way back in da 9th grade huh? Once a King always a King.
    *another Abberant General*
    | Posted on 2005-10-01 00:00:00 | by Robbing Hood | [ Reply to This ]
      i agree with amber. this is going on my fave list too. sometimes i can't think of a title so i just name it something from one of the lines in the verse. this is one of ur first non angry writes and i liked it. the first lines were the best and it hooked me. i started bobbing my head as i was rapping this.
    | Posted on 2005-09-23 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
      liked it alot...ya the title doesnt go with the thingy but thats ok you know...theywere both creative! i like the putting the seed in your mind...that was kickin...FAV LIST!

    | Posted on 2005-09-22 00:00:00 | by Suicidalchild51 | [ Reply to This ]

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