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    dots Submission Name: In my minddots
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    Author: cerberus
    ASL Info:    21
    Elite Ratio:    4.37 - 9/11/5
    Words: 175
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    Description:
       Been awhile since I've written anything. I feel this way after having an argument with someone
    and then sitting alone to cool off.


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    dotsIn my minddots
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    I used to work on the
    pathways that I have.
    Each one was connected
    so that there would be
    many when I come running
    from the living conutry side.
    But, they have destroyed
    themselves ever so slowly now
    for minutes and minutes.

    And, how I would want
    to swim in the rivers again.
    From the left to the right,
    because fantasy gave
    give me asylum from reason.
    But, the waters transformed
    themselves into fjords with beautiful,
    immovable hill sides and brilliantly dark
    waters.

    I jumped from the water when they
    became frigid, like a penguin fleeing
    from the leopard seal onto an iceberg
    and being hot because blood is stumbling
    through the akwardly beating heart.

    There I was in my black and white suit.
    And here I stand, melting into a puddle of
    myself. I scream and yell: Listen to me,
    please! Are you there?
    No echos and no one hears me.
    Nothing remains after devouring
    myself in that noisy silence.




    Submitted on 2005-09-22 21:25:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      you have some wonderful images here - my favorite is


    And here I stand, melting into a puddle of
    myself.

    i think what you may need is so add some context so these images are connected to some sort of overall structure. i think of a poem as, in a way, a sort of short story with a structure in which events happen. here you have the events. what are the reasons and outcomes?

    joey
    | Posted on 2005-09-22 00:00:00 | by joeym1962 | [ Reply to This ]


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