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    dots Submission Name: 9/21dots
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    Author: AngelOutlaw
    ASL Info:    19/female/WA
    Elite Ratio:    4.37 - 672/392/64
    Words: 216
    Class/Type: Prose/Love
    Total Views: 234
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1503



    Description:
       a letter in prose. you know who you are.


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    dots9/21dots
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    It seems that you think
    You can't be what
    I really want to have.
    I entertained that thought
    All day long,
    Focusing on someone
    I could have here.
    After spending 6 of 7
    Classes with him,
    I won't deny that
    He's an awesome guy
    Who would treat me well,
    And I think he
    May like me.
    However, at the end of
    The day,
    While sitting across from him,
    Listening to our teacher
    Talk about the Ontological Argument,
    I came to the conclusion
    That I don't want him.
    He doesn't make me feel
    The way you do.
    He doesn't feel for me
    What you say you do.
    He doesn't have with me
    What I have with you.
    I don't know why
    You can't see
    What I see in you.
    What keeps you from
    Believing you're who
    I want to be with?
    I know you don't
    Want to hurt me,
    Or hold me back,
    Or keep me from
    Anything, or
    Anyone.
    You can't do that.
    Only I can,
    And that's my choice.
    What you mean to me
    No one can change.
    The distance
    Doesn't mean a damn.
    Taking it easy,
    Slowing down,
    Neither will do
    A fucking thing
    To change the
    Way I feel.
    What can I do
    To convince you
    that, damn it,
    I love you?




    Submitted on 2005-09-22 21:39:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Straight from the heart and thats how things should be. You know, I was told once by a friend, who isn't a poet, that poetry should be written with an audience in mind. Can you believe that? The point being, poetry (or prose in this case) should be as personal as possible and well... this is about as personal as you can get. I liked all the little details you fit into this, such as what the teacher talks about, and it really puts the "big" things, like those three words, into perspectice. Thanks for sharing.
    | Posted on 2006-01-07 00:00:00 | by JimweiZERO | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked this write

    You expressed perfectly just how much you care and love this person
    Sometimes others are just afraid to show love in return
    It seems like this is the case in your ordeal

    Give him time and if it was meant to be it will happen
    Take Care
    Ron

    If you get a chance please take a look at my poems and let me know what you think
    Thank You
    Ron
    | Posted on 2005-11-03 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      Feeling are so important in life, this is a fine writing, bringing to the surface many things that hold true with people. "What keeps you from believing you're who I want to be with?", "The distance doesn't mean a damn.", these things I have experienced many times in my own life, this writing made me remember these..."What can I do To convince you that, damn it, I love you?"...here recently I have pondered this very question within my own circumstances...
    ~Alan
    | Posted on 2005-09-24 00:00:00 | by MidnghtScorpion | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey, good one and I liked how it trickled down to the very last question. Kind of one of those good to the last drop things, ya know? But as in all good relationships...a person should only hold you back from things/situations that they know will hurt you...and the cool part is that they will also help you excel too. Its kinda neat when that happens. Anyway, I am rambling. Have a good one and keep smilin'
    | Posted on 2005-09-22 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]


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