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    Author: smlaw
    ASL Info:    18/m/ny
    Elite Ratio:    4.48 - 56/37/10
    Words: 342
    Class/Type: Misc/Longing
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    from the second i saw you i felt it. there was something different about you, and i wanted to know what it was. i wanted to know you; to understand you; to be around you. there's just something there, and sometimes i think you see that too. but othet times i wonder if you even notice me? i've felt it before, but not like this, not this quick, not in this same way.

    i barely know you, but its there. you walk in the room, you open your mouth; you just sit there and do nothing. it feel like my stomach wants to jump out of my mouth.

    i can't tell anyone else. they wouldn't understand. they don't know you, and if they do, they don't know me. nobody can understand what it is without knowing you and knowing me. they can't understand; they won't understand.

    so i try to play it cool like there is nothing there. but that drives me insane! why should i have to ignore what i see could be there; is there. i feel like i'm denying something that i feel is right. like by ignoring it i'm saying that there is something wrong with it, but there isn't. just because i barely know you, and you barely know me, doesn't mean that there couldn't be that connection.

    do you feel it like i feel it? do you sense what i sense? sometimes i think you do...but other times i just don't know.

    i wish i could ask you these questions, i wish you could give me those answers. but i can't lose what i do have, what i could have. i can't risk it all for something i don't know is there. something i only think could be there. does that make me a coward? does that make me a wuss? or does that make me wiser?




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      a very good poem with some classic questions we all have asked at one time or another

    You showed true feelings in this write

    There is nothing wrong with loving a person
    And yes I believe true love can happen in a second

    Before you do ask her these questions make sure you take time to reflect on the friendship you have before you jump into love
    I have a funny feeling that you will find love with this woman as your heart is screaming out in this write for her

    Go For It
    Ron

    Let Me know what happens keep in touch
    | Posted on 2005-10-25 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      Here's a coin, toss and and pick heads or tails! These questions you've asked in here at one time or another a majority of us have had to answer. I did and my coin failed me, maybe you'd have better luck. It's so easy to stay in the arms of the familiar, to remain where you know it's comfortable. I'm telling you that isn't always the best way to be about things. That mystery is intriguing and it's exploring that mystery that I believe makes us grow-it's the only way to truly explore life. You can't explore and discover if you never venture into the unknown. It's definately a difficult situation that you described here and could go in so many different ways. I wish you luck with anything that comes your way that you have to ask these questions and desperately search for the answers. It's never easy and I'm not sure that there is ever a "right" answer.
    I also want to let you know that I'm really enjoying reading your work and hope that you keep 'em coming! Great job and thanks for sharing!
    Candi
    | Posted on 2005-10-06 00:00:00 | by dreamweaver | [ Reply to This ]
      It's a condrum! What to do? You know the sayings "A bird in the hand etc" then there's "Nothing ventured, nothing gained"

    But your not asking her to marry you jusy saying hi and being friendly. I know, I know not easy when your knees are jello!

    But if you think about it in small steps it makes approaching her easier.

    Steve
    | Posted on 2005-09-26 00:00:00 | by SHRINKSDR | [ Reply to This ]
      HMMM good questions...the one time in my life that I instantly felt it was right took me on a three year roller coaster of emotion. It turned out to be wonderful and horrible all at the same time, but a person can only live with that kind of emotion for so long so we both moved on.. I settled with someone who brought me a deep sense of contentment and have not been sorry at all...You may still wonder what if..it's only human, but lifes a 50/50 chance with someone you don't know.
    | Posted on 2005-09-23 00:00:00 | by jaycee | [ Reply to This ]


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