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    dots Submission Name: Vincentdots
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    Author: luvy
    ASL Info:    19/F/AZ
    Elite Ratio:    4.45 - 270/168/35
    Words: 213
    Class/Type: Misc/Longing
    Total Views: 725
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    Bytes: 1351



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       this one was about my bo friend and when he broke up wth me. he told me that his feelings for me went away. i realy dont know how this happens especaly when just the day beofre you were fine and happy but moving on he came back at lunch and wanted to talk to me.what we talked about confused me but then at the same time made me a bit happier. i think im just a fool though for wanting him back.


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    She told herself that she wouldnt love him with all her heart.
    Every time that she did her heart got torn apart.
    She didnt know how and she didn know why but you managed to capture it all.
    She loved you more than any guy before.
    She put all that she had into you and you let her down.
    Telling her that your feelings for her had all gone away.
    At that moment what little happines she had left faded into the background.
    she went through the rest of the day feeling like a zombie.
    Feeling empty and alone.
    She had friends there and she could feel the love but it wasnt the same.
    you found her and came back to her wanting to talk.
    Then you told her something that put the hope back into her heart.











































































    Submitted on 2005-09-23 16:20:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this one kinda started off as a poem and that just became a rant. u coulda worked on format more but it still came out alright in the end due to the feelings behind it. and i actually understand the background behind this one
    | Posted on 2005-10-06 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
      it is a rant.but i like rants.they tend to be more raw and emotional.and feeling i like.format and ryme are not important for me to like soooooooo.
    sometimes we do not know what are actions tyully say.we are not aware a lot of the time.and we inadvertently hurt one another.this is human nature and it sucks
    but WE play both roles in life=we are both the giver and the reciepent.
    try not to judge the other person so harshly.
    more than likely,he didnt mean to
    i know i didnt...

    toyysruss
    | Posted on 2005-09-23 00:00:00 | by toyysruss | [ Reply to This ]
      this was good since i was there it makes more sense to me! but isome parts didnt flow rite but i liked it! maybe u should ocme back to it! ill see u on monday! i dont even noe where my soccer game is at!
    ~akaila evonne~
    | Posted on 2005-09-23 00:00:00 | by iluvpoetry_1 | [ Reply to This ]
      That is more like a split second of emotion rather than a poem. What me and a lot of my friends do is wait until later to write about an emotion we've felt. For example;when you get the urge to write don't write about what you are feeling at that moment, instead write about what you've felt before or what you often feel at other times.
    | Posted on 2005-09-23 00:00:00 | by alittlebithippy | [ Reply to This ]


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