This was a nice surprise, and i liked the personification of Rita. I liked the wry ending where you have mixed feelings about dodging the bullet -but missing the ride.
I know I shouldn't comment on spelling, but there are so many words here spelled wrong sissa, that it takes from the flow as one reads it, -besides the ones already mentioned by Phil there is "volatile" , "mesmerize" and "voluptuous". Maybe an imp is hiding in your spellchecker lol.
I think "Rita" scared the hell out of a lot of folks, especially those already suffering in Katrina's wake. Surely, Texas, was where she seemed to want to "wreck and roll". Thank God she tired and didn't hit with her fullest punch. She was a huge storm at one point, of record size, a giant. I hate to think what the "ride" would have been like, very bumpy I'm afraid. Nice bit of tongue in cheek metaphor, Rita, as a fearsome woman. Enjoyed this poem. Just for the record - "beats", "erratic", "tattoos", and "disappointed".
Well I have to say I would have never thought someone would write about something like this. Dancing with a hurricane was a different one. I'm probably missing it but I don't quite get the dancing with Rita part at all. To be quite honest I didn't really get this one bit but it was a interesting one to read and kind of seemed a bit funny for some reason. Though now that I think about it I think I'm starting to get the idea of this. But anyways. The poem had a good flow and rhythm and all that cute and great stuff. So no complaints in those areas. Umm yea thats all I had to say I think...
dancing, eh? that sounds pretty good (care to dance?) I don't think I could be flawless like Rita and seem so "volitile" while doing so. .. Back to the poem.. I like the wording of it. I can see a red dress floating around and brown curls swinging back and forth as they followed the music. Then I see green eyes glinting flirtatiously yet not really giving a damn about who responds back. (Am I right?) Well anyway good job. (I'm not very good criticizing a stranger's poem. )
Submission Name: Dancing with Rita
