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Submission Name: death of a love dots

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Author:	Seedofbayne
ASL Info:	19/M/MA
Elite Ratio:	3.37 - 55/82/27
Words:	111

Class/Type:	Poetry/
Total Views:	362
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
Bytes:	642

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death of a love dots

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the headlines in the paper read
true love is finally dead
but I can feel you burning
through the back of my head
the last heart breaks tonight
you and I in our final fight
with me it never ends well at all
but tonight, its my turn to fall
with your good looks
and my one track mind
we were perfect until we found
that i was in love
and you were just bound
its raining crimson for this boy
and to the girl, he was just a toy
and to his first he says goodbye
no time to live
but his love will never DIE.....

Submitted on 2005-09-23 21:40:18 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Mike i think this is an amazing peice - ur writting keep getting better and better. Honestly i know you will find the right girl someday because your sooo sweet and nice and perfect! She will find you and you will see her and it will just ... well ... click!

This peice shows that all true love will always be there it will never be forgotten - but put on the back burrer for a time. It shows the pain one must go through when the other seems so carefree and is not even realising the pain the "other" is going through ... I think its a fabulous peice keep up the great work!

I love you more then Ice Cream!
| Posted on 2005-09-28 00:00:00 | by Thirst4Serenity | [ Reply to This ]
  wow michael..deep.. sorry im so [censored]n stoned right now i smoked soo much.. n omg brians so mad at me cuz i [censored]d some dude.. wow n i hung out w/ terri last night n he was bein a douche [censored] n u need to b online cuz i miss you latas nig
| Posted on 2005-09-25 00:00:00 | by scardnscared | [ Reply to This ]
  I liked this poem becuase it's how love is when you say goodbye to the person.Its always there it wont ever die.But when your saying goodbye to it,everything makes you want to cry.Great write!
| Posted on 2005-09-24 00:00:00 | by ArtichokeMosher | [ Reply to This ]
  That's groovy man. It has flow you know. Also a smooth sad feel that doesn't burst with pain but more with a painful understanding.
| Posted on 2005-09-24 00:00:00 | by alittlebithippy | [ Reply to This ]
  you had a great idea at first=newspaper,newscaster=creativity was most apperant in this.then you turned to ryme.in my opinion you shoud have stuck with either or
maybe carried the newspaper and newscasting all the way through the write=all one persons opinion
on another note=topic was of great interest to me.i do not deal well with loosing a loved one.i am not accostomed to loosing,in any aspect of my life
i felt ya a little bit so cool

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| Posted on 2005-09-24 00:00:00 | by toyysruss | [ Reply to This ]

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