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    dots Submission Name: Pool of Deceptiondots

    Author: EL
    Elite Ratio:    3.39 - 272/189/52
    Words: 134
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsPool of Deceptiondots

    Every time I take another chance with you
    It's like I'm taking another dive into,
    Into this pool,
    This pool of deception,
    Every time I take a look into your eyes,
    Into your deceitful eyes,
    I become spellbound unable to move,
    Unable to move forward,
    Every time I listen to your deceiving words,
    My mind becomes bombarded,
    Bombarded with misleading promises,
    Promises with no meaning,
    Every time I try to escape this pool,
    This pool of deception,
    You lock me down with your chain of lies,
    Lies that have a death grip,
    Death grip hold on me,
    I'm begging, pleading with you,
    Please just let me be,
    Let me breath,
    Don't leave me here to drown,
    Drown in this pool of deception.

    Submitted on 2005-09-24 11:24:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i really liked this a lot and i really understand what you are talking about and it happen in real life a lot i know that i went through this and it was very stressful and confusing but i got through it and if its happening to you be strong...great write..its going to be a fav...
    | Posted on 2005-09-24 00:00:00 | by bleedinbabygrl8 | [ Reply to This ]

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