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Author: manicsmuse
ASL Info:    28
Elite Ratio:    3.69 - 146 /161 /55
Words: 41
Class/Type: Misc /Misc
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I can't shake the feelings
Never clear on what is real
Searching, but always lost
I can never see my way through the woods
Dialing for heros but finding

Malignancy roaming my veins
Each and every breath a waste

Submitted on 2005-09-24 13:57:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  i think maybe you could have put some effort into this piece. you could have added a title, a type, a class, a description, something. other than that, i liked this poem. i like the next to last line. "Malignancy roaming my veins" its a very unique thought.
| Posted on 2005-09-24 00:00:00 | by brokenroses | [ Reply to This ]

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