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What I have found...

Author: MurphyGirl44
Elite Ratio:    3.69 - 70 /76 /25
Words: 140
Class/Type: Misc /Passion
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What I have found...

Candlelight flickers throughout the vision is blurry...a glaze of pleasure blocks my sight

Our moans echo through the room...bouncing off the gold and artistic turquoise walls

Intoxicating scents fill the room...of bath oil...candles...and the scent of our own bodies colliding

I grasp your skin...trailing my fingers over your muscular seem to be even warmer then the water...

My lips lay against your neck...licking and nibbling...kissing...breathing in your ear...whispering...

Water overflows as our pace body tingles and becomes warm all over...I look into your eyes and our lips meet...and then an explosion happens between us as our breath comes out as gasps and we moan as aftershocks of pleasure ripple through our bodies

I look into your eyes again and find something I can't explain but can feel deep inside of me....

Submitted on 2005-09-24 17:50:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  splash, splash, sex! i like to content and love the way in which u have written this, quite descriptive as i could see the room, the dull lighting, naked bodies in the water...
Just to much "as" in the 6th stanza

Nice nice nicely done

Keep spreading the love
| Posted on 2005-10-07 00:00:00 | by AfricanPrincess | [ Reply to This ]
  This is sweet and romantic ...I dont know thats there was anything that really jumped out at me ....But it still was a really nice read ...something to warm me up while its cold outside ...niceone
| Posted on 2005-09-29 00:00:00 | by Krysti | [ Reply to This ]
  Takes you away from the sexual into the sensual, then inside the mind..."I look into your eyes again and find something I can't explain but can feel deep inside of me" is the perfect close.
I think...I feel...when the passion enters though one anothers is this moment you realize love of this person...where time and space means nothing...moving you so deep inside you enter into one anothers soul for a moment.
| Posted on 2005-09-27 00:00:00 | by MidnghtScorpion | [ Reply to This ]

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