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Ode to Judgment


Author: xeternalshadowx
ASL Info:    17/m/pennsylvania
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SOBB + JD = hell on earth


Ode to Judgment



One million stars ago He fell,
Foreclosed in a chamber
Till Dawn's Razor falls deep and wide,
Inside our Mother's city under the sea.
From R'lyeh shall the prison walls ache,
At the time that the Heavens are as one.
Tis then that the Great Dreamer awakes,
And the mouth of Yog-Sothoth shall open once more.

[Dreams of life are virtues not taken astride,
For the only blood refined is that of angels and demons.
The cavities will in time be stretched open,
And fear will be bred under oath,
For dread is brought asunder
From within evil, caught alone.
Reality evanesces as the crease folds,
The duality of blind eyes.
The presence their tears hold
Is no more than a stranger left behind.

Feeble kin without control,
They are the voices that are never heard.
Death to their desire,
The end rides tonight,
For they witness the ascension;
Without heart,
Without mercy,
While He bids Himself to rise
And His name shakes the Earth and Heavens.]

The cries of Babylon are martyrs in their selves,
And indeed the waves washing upon the shore
Are His every breath, bellow, and thought.
The stars above are clockwork,
Gears turning with every shimmer and shine,
And the hour hand shifting with the horizon
Until one day that the stars are right.
It is this time, this time,
That His call of judgment is answered
Inside a circle of sand and blood.




Submitted on 2005-09-24 18:46:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Definitly and interesting poem. It flows with contempt, anger and perhaps a little justification. I like the style that this was written in, it seems to me that it is in an "inbetween" style.

Dreams of life are virtues not taken astride,
For the only blood refined is that of angels and demons.
The cavities will in time be stretched open,
And fear will be bred under oath,
For dread is brought asunder
From within evil, caught alone.
Reality evanesces as the crease folds,
The duality of blind eyes.
The presence their tears hold
Is no more than a stranger left behind.

This is my favorite part of the poem. This is the part of the poem that speaks out the most to me. It's nice reading something by you again. Keep writing and Ciao.
| Posted on 2005-10-21 00:00:00 | by BrokenAngel | [ Reply to This ]
  H. P. Lovecraft fan, eh? Never really read any of his stuff, but I've heard it's pretty good stuff.

I like the style in which this poem is written; I've never read any of Lovecraft's stuff so I don't really understand some of what you are talking about, and I can easily see how some of it could be interpreted in the biblical sense, but seeing as how you allude to Yog-Sothoth ("The Key and the Gate", a god with boundless power, but trapped inside of the universe we inhabit, my sources tell me..) it appears you are not referring to the bible at all.

I think my confusion spawns from my ignorance of Lovecraft's Cthulhu Mythos and it's fictional reality...

Like I said, however, I did enjoy the style in which it was written! Perhaps you could write something simalarly stylized but not so dependant upon a particular work of fiction? I think that may be a bit more well-recieved, but perhaps I am just out of a loop here or something..

~Jared
| Posted on 2005-09-24 00:00:00 | by Jared | [ Reply to This ]


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