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    dots Submission Name: Kissdots

    Author: BrownEyedBeauty
    ASL Info:    15/F/IL
    Elite Ratio:    2.74 - 10/14/4
    Words: 91
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 944
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       Um.....I coudnt think of a title, but this was inspired by my boyfriend and i'm not afraid to say so! Haha, love ya babe!

    P.S.- Can someone thnk of a title for me? I just can't come up with one that fits the poem...

    P.P.S.- Sorry, I had to use your name love. :^)

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    What is this feeling
    So pure and true
    I can sense it in my every being
    Like the kiss of a butterfly
    Gentle breezes from a pond
    Quiet kisses at night
    The warm embrace of the sun
    As an angel takes flight
    Could this be love?
    Or is this simply heaven?
    This feeling of freedom, kiss me again
    A kiss so sweet and gentle
    A kiss i yearn for
    Hold me like you've held no other
    Love me as I love you
    With all my heart
    I love you
    My Marc.

    Submitted on 2005-09-24 20:54:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      OMG u and Mac make me sick wit this luv crap :^) I'm kidden. I am really happy for Marc and I remember what it feels like to be head over heels in love. It's intoxicating and overwhelming and scary. Marc is a wonderfully wierd guy and is extremely lovable so I understand how he has become an inspiration for u. This was really good. You definatly havev a way with words and I like it. I can't help you with a tittle because the one you have is OK. Leave it be, you can't exspand on perfection. remember that. I will be adding this as a favorite. Good job JOYA.
    | Posted on 2006-02-13 00:00:00 | by Chi-Town Rose | [ Reply to This ]
      JOYA, I LOVE YOU SO MUCH! I honestly think this is one of your best poems and thats not just because it was inspired by me. The use of words and emotions was intense especially for you! Great work!
    | Posted on 2005-09-24 00:00:00 | by Midnight_Rose | [ Reply to This ]

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