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    dots Submission Name: Dearest Medots
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    Author: miss__smiles
    ASL Info:    16/f/Soo, Ont
    Elite Ratio:    3.28 - 117/110/20
    Words: 188
    Class/Type: Poetry/Sorry
    Total Views: 822
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    Bytes: 1182



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       A poem I wrote to the future me....


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    dotsDearest Medots
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    Dearest me,
    in the far future
    Will you look back,
    And regret me?

    Will you look back
    and regret leaving Wayne?
    Or look back and regret
    Driving yourself insane?

    Which ex's will you miss?
    Which friends will you want back?
    What problems will you fix
    Did you give me a smack?

    Will you miss your mom?
    Do you miss your dad?
    Do you miss me,
    Or the fun that we had?

    Do you miss your life?
    Do you miss not having fun?
    Did you have that daughter?
    Did you have a son?

    How bout a family?
    I know that's what you dreamt
    Did Dave ever talk to you?
    Or was he just a dick.

    Did you ever meet Scott?
    Did you meet Clint or Bob?
    Did your life get better,
    Or is it still a sob?

    Did you change your selfish ways
    Did you meet a guy who did?
    Have you finally made a vow
    And stuck to it?

    Have you done all those things
    That we had planned
    Or are you the same pathetic loser
    That I still am.




    Submitted on 2005-09-24 21:04:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is very well written. I like the emotions that you put into writing this. I liked the way you flow from one sentence to the other. Also, the questions are the sort of type I would probably ask my future self. Good job.
    | Posted on 2005-11-12 00:00:00 | by She Is Insane | [ Reply to This ]
      Ooooh there was some nice feeling and emotion in here. This was very good I really liked it. It was interesting cause you were writing or talking to your old self and asking questions about yourself now. Or thats what it seemed to me.:-P. I've kind of done the same thing. Just questioned what I've done now and what I think. This piece basically said it all. I have zip-zero-silch complaints. I really liked this one. I think it might need a spot under my fav's!hehe. . ttyl


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    | Posted on 2005-09-30 00:00:00 | by Day DreaMeR | [ Reply to This ]
      That is awsome woman you really captured it. I wrote something like that once, it fell in a fish tank (long story), anyway, mine wasn't as good as all that. It said something like (who will you someday be- will you forget me- will you tell your daughter will you tell your son- of all the old days when you had fun), and so on I can't remember the rest. Great write!
    | Posted on 2005-09-25 00:00:00 | by alittlebithippy | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow this has some good feeling to it. You made the reader feel what you felt and had a good flow with it. You seem to question yourself a lot but i'm sure you're not a pathetic sob and you'll go far in life with stuff like this Good write i love it!
    | Posted on 2005-09-25 00:00:00 | by ChaosSubmission | [ Reply to This ]


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