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    dots Submission Name: give me my stuff backdots
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    Author: EEKS
    Elite Ratio:    2.7 - 647/1206/773
    Words: 109
    Class/Type: Rant/What you did
    Total Views: 837
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 652



    Description:
       im a little wired today.. had to let it out.


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    dotsgive me my stuff backdots
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    Give me back my rolling stones album
    Give me back my aerosmith shirt
    Give me back all my cds, and movies
    You can keep your stupid apology
    So you need some time, you need some space? Take it
    You need time to think, time to breathe?
    While youre breathin
    Shut up and listen
    Give me back my time
    Give me back my smiles
    Give me back the motley crue tickets
    Give me back my secrets
    Give me back all the "i love yous"
    Give me back that love song I wrote too
    Stop trying to explain
    You can keep all your reasons
    I just want my stuff back




    Submitted on 2005-09-24 21:50:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      umm, i don't really like it cause it was more prose than poetry...i think....but i think it was more of a personal thing than to be rated by others...
    | Posted on 2006-07-05 00:00:00 | by ollie_wicked | [ Reply to This ]
      sounds like your in a situation
    id want my stuff back too but for most of it your just [censored] out of luck
    i like it
    its like"Get the [censored] out of my life but dont forgrt to give me my [censored] back"
    | Posted on 2005-09-24 00:00:00 | by Dark Romeo89 | [ Reply to This ]
      thats kind of a funny poem. hehe. i liked all the repetitviness of it and your style of writing. KEEP WRITING. it reminds me of another poem, but i can't remember what it is. anyway, i'm rambling like an idiot here so, i'll just leave you alone and next time i won't be lazy with my typing punctuation and capitalization.
    | Posted on 2005-09-24 00:00:00 | by Xochitle15 | [ Reply to This ]
      this reminded me of Ten Things I Hate About You. hmmm, i think since this is a rant it doesn't need much critique, unless you want to make this into something more. i liked how you had all your possessions then all the smiles, time, and memories. i'm sorry.
    | Posted on 2005-09-24 00:00:00 | by fabulousAMY | [ Reply to This ]


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