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    dots Submission Name: MoreThan AnyMan HasEver Beendots
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    Author: toyysruss
    Elite Ratio:    4.2 - 494/336/134
    Words: 283
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    Description:
       an ode


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    he plays husband too four
    you can't ask anymore
    than he asks of himself,
    he has wealth
    he's not a rich man,but he holds out his hand
    i grab to reach,and say
    teach

    all the demands,put on this man
    he smiles by,an understanding in his eye
    and all that is asked of him,would make an ordinary person grim.the four that is worked for,he truly must adore.the richest man i know,
    is what i'm trying to show.

    number one is his wife,my granmother his life.
    and as good as she is,his has Been.
    he's gave all he's got,without even a thought.
    and i tell you,it's always Been.
    she completes him so,and i hope she knows.
    that this has always Been

    number two and three,
    are his daughters you see,and i tell you he does better than Any.
    he goes beyond,the mile that's extra for them
    and he does this more than Any.
    our thoughts for him,our world revolves around him,and i say that for him,more than Any

    number four is where he becomes truly More,
    his grandson has turned out to be.
    more of a challenge to teach,
    i just wish he would reach,for that golden hand on that man.


    the way he percieves the world,is truly shown in his ways.a full time job he has.
    and not once has he been late to be,
    More than Any man has ever Been


    to you Da (donald herbert boggs)
    purple heart reciepient from world war 2
    80 years old,still works 35 hours a week at a grocery store,and moves around like hes 40
    on top of full time job i protray above

    cheers




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      Very beautiful
    I can see you love your grandfather very much
    It is so rare in this world to see the kind of love grandparents have for there grandchildren
    No matter what they are always there for us
    How I wish the Earth could see and learn from this Love

    Take Care
    Ron

    And as always thanks for your comments
    I Always enjoy hearing from you
    Ron
    | Posted on 2005-11-12 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      Well, I was just going to read this to see what it was about.. but I feel I must comment. I love the way you have expressed your admiration for your granddad in this write.. the way you look up to him.. and your love for him.
    He sounds like a wonderful man. My granddad was too. He died at age 95.
    I enjoyed reading this.
    Take care,
    ~Sandra
    | Posted on 2005-10-14 00:00:00 | by Intricate1 | [ Reply to This ]


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