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    dots Submission Name: make it sodots
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    Author: toyysruss
    Elite Ratio:    4.2 - 494/336/134
    Words: 122
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    dotsmake it sodots
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    let me know,when caring becomes wrong
    then ill stop
    only if we could rewind time
    stop the clock
    to go back and try again
    where's my friend

    let me know,when loving you becomes wrong
    i'll beg the differ
    maybe try to show you
    paint a picture
    of what our life is supposed to be
    can't you see
    that's not all that is left,and you're not right
    please love me

    let me know,when i'm wrong about you
    won't be true
    and if you don't know what i am talking about
    here's a clue
    you are to me,most perfectly
    my bestfriend
    and i'll think that most honestly
    till the end
    and after all this
    you still have to go
    make it so




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      I liked this write
    It is positive in that you are moving forward and letting Love guide you so you may better yourself in life
    By bettering yourself you are bettering those around you
    Exceelent Job
    Take Care
    Ron
    AndThank You for the recent commets
    Always enjoy hearing from you
    Your Friend
    Ron
    | Posted on 2005-12-03 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      I love this. So deep and hits very very close to home, although I would have been on the recieving end of this. I loved the first line, wonderful job there. It got me interested and also right from the start I could relate.

    Marvelous job, this is going in my favorites.

    Keep it up :)

    -Miss M.
    | Posted on 2005-11-17 00:00:00 | by fightingirl19 | [ Reply to This ]
      alrighty than, an entry about friends with lack of negativity and darkness, but subtle longing and care not one i can easily familiarize myself with suffice to say it's a new vision in my sight, one in which seems fare to say that'll for some time it'll be read, but not written by me. people often get upset by that inwhich they loose, but too often they fail to realize this; in order to lose comething you must first have had it to begin with and for that you were, even momentarily(at least in this type of sit.) blessed. take care
    | Posted on 2005-11-09 00:00:00 | by dismentled | [ Reply to This ]
      i really liked this.
    the feelings in here where ones i have not run into much but you made them very real here.

    'let me know,when caring becomes wrong
    then ill stop
    only if we could rewind time
    stop the clock
    to go back and try again
    where's my friend'

    the begining was my favorite part.
    really got me interested, & kept me reading.
    i really like how simple the form was, yet complicated the feelings were. Really made it very interesting.
    i liked this alot, you did a good job.
    Take care and keep smiling ;)
    ~jenn
    | Posted on 2005-09-27 00:00:00 | by joy7542 | [ Reply to This ]


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