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    dots Submission Name: A day of festivaldots
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    Author: Unicrom
    ASL Info:    30/m/pacific northwest
    Elite Ratio:    4.81 - 116/71/110
    Words: 273
    Class/Type: Poetry/What you did
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    Description:
       Ever stayed in one place too long. Ever felt the more you stayed the more you became?

    some times you just belong.


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    dotsA day of festivaldots
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    I went to the pavilion
    Took a stroll through the park of young and old.
    I was among friends.

    It must be October fest.

    The music was festive
    The people were cheerful
    The beer flowed just right

    It must be October fest

    While the carnival played on we came to a tent in the center of the park.
    There was music by a German band
    Food for as far as the eye could see.
    And lederhosen galore.

    The scent of sour kraut hits me like ape scent glory owen.

    It must be Oktober fest

    At the center of the tent was a wooden floor.
    Dancers of all ages and sizes danced about the floor.
    Some good some learning.

    The tango, the polka the chicken and many others.

    Es muß fest Oktober sein..

    I walk by the floor as I did many times.
    A German girl called Stormy grabs me and pulls me onto the dance floor.
    To my surprise I’m doing the chicken dance.

    Es muß fest Oktober sein.

    Die Bandanschläge, zum der Masse zu begrüssen. Schleifen singen über der Masse, wie sie Bier trinken. Ich Entdeckung selbst, die ein Pork/veal Bier sausuage mit Zwiebeln, Meerrettich und heißem Senf ißt.

    Es muß fest Oktober sein.

    Wir teilen das comradery der Mitleute über von der Welt. Haben Sie Spaß, spielen Sie Spiele und bilden Sie neue Freunde. Die Musik ist laut. Die Wettbewerbe sind Spaß und die Nahrung ist groß. Es muß fest Oktober sein
    und für was es wert mich ist, seien Sie dort folgendes Jahr.





    Submitted on 2005-09-25 03:47:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      hi this is really nice, I was surprised did you write also the German part? If yes then your German is better then my English.
    I liked the poem this is what really happens in October fest.
    with love shabnam
    | Posted on 2005-09-25 00:00:00 | by shabnam | [ Reply to This ]


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