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    dots Submission Name: In a Glance . . .dots
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    Author: uncreaTED
    Elite Ratio:    4.86 - 58/69/24
    Words: 131
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       While meditating I focused on a stone – in its sparkle a kaleidoscope of wondrous wisdom confronted me.


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    dotsIn a Glance . . .dots
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    In a Glance . . .

    In a glance; the whole Universe seen.
    Underfoot cerulean sky, overhead terra firma.
    The North Wind seeks the Southern Cross
    as an underground spring sounds wet.

    Ahead lies Salvation's perpetual path;
    behind lessons of abandoned regret molder.
    Tranquility, a pearl in an oyster of chaos.
    Forbidden fruit appears most delectable.

    Loose something to find its real worth.
    ' A bird in the hand ', is more felicitous in the bush—
    as are starlets in their blockbuster films.
    The perfume of success has the aroma of gold.

    Illusions are delusions that tax the mind—
    the Future is but tomorrow's past.
    No one need stop to have a look —
    Love feels unsurpassed when shared.




    Submitted on 2005-09-25 06:02:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      hey I thought that was you -tricky nmae change -what did ya get some death thrteats or something..piss the wrong guy or chick off-ok enuff to the write
    it was an extremely descriptive piece about well...alot of things...but what stood out to me was I am not sure if I am missing it or you merely just went ted-ism on me here but in the 1st s. all the lines sort of relate to each other but the 2s.
    Ahead lies Salvation's perpetual path;
    behind lessons of abandoned regret molder.
    Tranquility, a pearl in an oyster of chaos.
    Forbidden fruit appears most delectable
    [I mean I don't see where the forbiden fruit really slips in there..it could work I guess but-forbidden fruit like apearl taken in the chaos from an oyester???hmmmm-it might actually work there sssshhhhhh Iam ona roll can't stop*
    I love the 3s. and you are right that girls do look better in the bushor not in the bush in the leaf would be ok with me no need for a forest or jungle scene but yeah it was my fav partok I'll give ya the last stanza thing it could work but the last-it I can not find the coonnection and where it could te itself to another piece of the stanza help me there would ya-otherwise I think the imagery you portray has come along...see I told ya you didn't need me to do it for ya...lol and your witting i s getting more deliberate and less evasive with clever trickery -which we all like and should use but use it well and dont od you might find nobody understanding anything ya write-lost in the translation goes another one...anyway nice to read ya again and it really is comming together
    cya
    LamemansTerms
    | Posted on 2005-09-25 00:00:00 | by LameMansTerms | [ Reply to This ]


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