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    dots Submission Name: The Babysitter Part onedots
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    Author: Drea
    ASL Info:    18/f/nowhere
    Elite Ratio:    3.79 - 289/142/53
    Words: 142
    Class/Type: Poetry/Comedy
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    Description:
       It's a funny little series I wanted to do... because I hate kids but Im always babysitting.lol.If you dont get it Im sorry. Oh and for the whole story inspiration thing... I would like to thank Josymanthegreat. His idea first in the noise... so if oyu have time read that too.


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    dotsThe Babysitter Part onedots
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    Little children all around
    I cannot stand their noisy sound
    Children screaming everywhere
    I cannot take their evil glares

    Whinning, crying shouting, again
    Honestly, my patience are coming to an end
    I cant take these demon children
    So in their food is an overdose of ritlin

    I hate kids why did I take this job
    The Mom gets home to find she's been robbed
    Her children locked in the closet
    She thinks to herself who could have done this

    Where is the babysitter? mom asks
    She said if we told she'd kick our ass
    So mom is upset and mad as hell
    She said when she finds me... I'll never make bail

    So first she goes to my hous
    Too late Im already checked out
    After walking furhter she sees
    all her stuff I sold on the street...




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      lol this was great!! keep it up
    | Posted on 2006-11-06 00:00:00 | by CFHillyard | [ Reply to This ]
      LMAO Oh my Gawd... First of all i would like to thank myself for being an inspiration lmao so self centered me... Great write waiting for part two beacuse this was funny... I think you could have made two entire parts out of this one but its nice that we got to see what happened so far... little children can be devils at time but thats how we were back then so yea... Thanks for the laugh and for saying that i was the inspirer if you need any help you know how to contact me... Thanks and Good job please keep writting
    | Posted on 2005-09-25 00:00:00 | by josymanthegreat | [ Reply to This ]
      It is funny. You have talent along this line. Your off-rhyme is good and helps contribute to the comedy.
    | Posted on 2005-09-25 00:00:00 | by my shadow | [ Reply to This ]


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