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the poem note


Author: nsnaakyhhh:)
ASL Info:    15/F/WA
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the poem note



The blank parchment stares at her,
with sullen disappointment
If begs to be scribbled and scrawled,
with her self-made soul-ointment
How can she write down,
what’s happening inside
For even her heart,
she does not trust for a guide
Yet after only a moments hesitation
she begins a poets letter,
her soul’s declaration
How good it feels to simply write,
get her hurts and hopes on paper
How good if feels to simply give,
her heart out through a pen
Forever to be written down,
scratched out and written again




Submitted on 2005-09-25 12:11:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I like the last part not because the entirety of it made me suffer. I saw it as one of those endings that hasn't really ended yet, for you bring a natural image with the line:
"Forever to be written down,
scratched out and written again"

I agree with Lucy that your writing skills have come far. I told you not too long ago that you need not choke your writing with metaphors and things that are beyond other people's comprehension. Poetry is beautiful because, in most cases, people write a genuineness that is amiss in news, manuals, magazines, etc.

I'm so very proud of you.
:tear:

Viva Forever,
Suven
| Posted on 2005-11-13 00:00:00 | by Suven7 | [ Reply to This ]
  Rainmaker...You're poetry is really evolving. That's a good thing, I think. I think that whether or not anyone reads it, it's a great way to track self highs, lows, feelings, thoughts....and reading a poem you wrote perhaps last winter can help remember feelings you might have lost or forgotton. This poem is really beautiful....how right you are when you say
"For even her heart,
she does not trust for a guide"
But I mean...not just that. But nearly every line had so much to say....I admire this piece of art. I really do. Rarely does a poem speak to me like this one. The last four lines are amazing as well. The rhyming flows nicely for the most part. This is a favorite and it's a well deserved one too. Keep writing....Peace.
Your friend, lucy
| Posted on 2005-09-28 00:00:00 | by LucyDiamond | [ Reply to This ]
  its a goody..its like "adaptation"..a writer writes about trying to write...and ends up with a screenplay about a writer trying to write a screenplay about orchids..its a goody check it out
| Posted on 2005-09-25 00:00:00 | by happy | [ Reply to This ]
  this is a great poem. the imagery is very strong. i can mentally picture her sitting down and writing. the only weird part was "For ever he heart" it just didnt seem to fit. it didnt really take away from or ruin the poem, but it just seemed odd. i can really connect to this. ive done this once or twice, just sat down and ranted. its really nice to do.
| Posted on 2005-09-25 00:00:00 | by brokenroses | [ Reply to This ]
  Great expression of the drive for creativity, the page calling to be written upon. Wonderful, I love it. I feel the same way. I write in calligraphy and I have stacks of parchment that I see as words waiting to be written. It also applies to the feeling of the canvas calling me to paint. Perhaps I wil write about that, Thanks for the idea. A fantastic poem, yours. Love it!
| Posted on 2005-09-25 00:00:00 | by alittlebithippy | [ Reply to This ]
  I think this is a perfect example on what nearly everyone does when they sit down to write (at least I do; I can't speak for everyone else)
It's a beautiful poem, and I really didn't see anything wrong with it.
| Posted on 2005-09-25 00:00:00 | by Ta-hala | [ Reply to This ]


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