Well, this is short and sweet and very self explanatory. No one wants to be a feather blowing about...though we all might say we do, yet it nice to be anchored to something, ya know? If only just one thing/person. Very vivid and poignant and an honest portait of loving, ya know? Have a good one.
another gem of a 4-liner... HOW DO YOU DO THAT????? Upper-range 4, I think. Cora's right, 1 & 4 are a touch out of rhythm. 1 has 1 syllable too many, 4 needs one more syllable. The funny thing is, I read line 4 as "A slave UNto the breeze" w/o realizing it. Just had a thought.... a feather in the breeze doesn't fall at a constant pace... it shifts and hesitates... is that what you were going for? If so, please ignore everything else I said! <><