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    dots Submission Name: The Silencedots

    Author: josymanthegreat
    ASL Info:    21/m/GA from Puerto Rico
    Elite Ratio:    4.73 - 337/364/104
    Words: 77
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       I have kind of a problem with it being silent because it makes me paranoid in such a way that i won't sleep if i dont have a sound around... so i wrote this

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    dotsThe Silencedots

    In the night I hear nothing
    No crickets chirp
    And the pain of the silence
    I feel within

    Desolated by everyone
    alone, if you will
    I get paranoia
    or away from whats real

    I wonder and wonder
    what is the deal
    why do all this urges
    send me such a thrill

    Such a dash of adrenaline
    Why it affects me like this
    Ive got it figured out
    The silence takes over me

    Submitted on 2005-09-25 14:35:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow... I could sssooooooo relate to this I hate quiet... thats why I talk so much. This was a great piece. I thought the flow was good and the style everything. Good Job!
    | Posted on 2005-09-27 00:00:00 | by Drea | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a nice expression of an inner feeling! Self awareness is always so helpful to keep the peace within yourself and knowing what certain things cause anxiety is a means of prevention. They say silence is deafening and it holds lots of truth to it. It does create a sad and lonely feeling and I find music always seems to help me rid the silence. This is a well written poem! Good job with this one! See ya!

    | Posted on 2005-09-26 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]
      Nice write. I know how you feel i won't go anywhere unless there is some kinda noise, preferably music. Anyway great write. Keep up the good work.

    | Posted on 2005-09-25 00:00:00 | by skullreaperX_X | [ Reply to This ]
      weird but ok i would rather have it loud too because i can't stand it when all is quiet it gets so mysterious and lonely that is why i have my cd player with me wherever i go and of course some loud obnoxius music like system of a down . peace ~becka
    | Posted on 2005-09-25 00:00:00 | by boo boo | [ Reply to This ]

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