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    dots Submission Name: Vanity Faredots
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    Author: uncreaTED
    Elite Ratio:    4.86 - 58/69/24
    Words: 91
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    Description:
       Living where I do, I've been having a lot of trouble with 'face' lately; not mine, that's alwayz been a prob! No, with people who wear two; but don't know it!


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    dotsVanity Faredots
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    Vanity Fare


    She's with you always,
       behind every mirror.
    Any reflective surface is
       a magnet that draws you near.

    Narcissism daren't exist
       when your own perception
    is obviously the center
       of a vicarious deception.

    Scorn, you adorn
       with justified pride,
    though more be directed
       at you, than you hold inside.

    Frivolous folly cherished
       with self-centered glee,
    from you most shun
       and graciously flee.

    When age plays its part
       you absently forget,
    preferring to marvel
       on delusions than regret.





    Submitted on 2005-09-26 00:12:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Having self asteem problems? The answer: plastic surgery! Yay! Just kidding, don't do it.
    Yup, this country is getting more frivolous by the minute, and every Amercian's center of attention and care is on the most superfluous thing of all: namely, our face. I must admit, I'm guilty of fretting over zits and such, but we all must be care of fretting to much. As for the poem, very intellegently written, and I like poems that focus the attention on the issue or point more than on the poem itself, and both were made pretty well, so I can't really think of any complaints. Very good. Moooooooo.
    | Posted on 2005-09-26 00:00:00 | by Jeniffer | [ Reply to This ]


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