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Submission Name: any chance dots

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Author:	scardnscared
ASL Info:	20
Elite Ratio:	2.87 - 339/412/258
Words:	182

Class/Type:	Poetry/Depressed
Total Views:	259
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
Bytes:	1103

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any chance dots

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my crystal vision over comes the pain
i hold on tight when the rain pours down
i was so high strung i never thought
falling down last would hurt so much

what am i waiting for?
i need something to hold me
i need the sweetness i need the love
please heaven above, help me?

my tears no longer fall a huefull blue
they come down a crimson path
scaring upon my delicate cheek
take it; please take the pain back

i stare at the mirror image
i watch my world crash down again
smash the glass i cant take it
i cant stand it here now

they tell me to hold on dear
ill make it through the worst yet
screaming so quietly they never knew
i took the bloody life from you

you stole my virtue
defiled my good natured contempt
made me blood thirsting
something i cant forget

i scratch till i bleed
the cut marks cant be seen
so slowly i wish my death
somehow i find my way out of here

Submitted on 2005-09-26 13:32:15 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Powerful seems to be the popular word here and it is suiting. A lot of people don't write on these topics cause they're scarred. Of what exactly I do not know. But you did it beautifully. A job well done sweet heart.
| Posted on 2005-09-26 00:00:00 | by Jessa | [ Reply to This ]
  Very powerful and emotive. The structure was very good and everything about it hung together. Not an easy subject to write about, but you did it superbly well.
| Posted on 2005-09-26 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]
  your such a [censored] awesome poet...im in awe of how well you can put words together and have such a meaning behind them...you are, by far, the best poet i have ever known...and it shows in this piece...i read two stanzas...and my jaw dropped...i read the rest...and i almost cried...i seriously think...nvm...i was gonna say something but...you might have gotten mad...and hated me...but ya anyways...this is going into my faves...i lova you ash <333 michael
| Posted on 2005-09-26 00:00:00 | by Seedofbayne | [ Reply to This ]
  This is an extremely powerful piece i am a little worried about you yhou if you ever need someone to talk to just send me a comment or e mail me at Nymets1986worldchamps@yahoo.com
Believe me i can tell from the write we have a LOT in commen please take care of yourself
| Posted on 2005-09-26 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]

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