The Last Apology -------------------------------------------
Tears in the form of words
Tangled throughout the pages
Confusion and anxiety
Passed down through the ages
You couldn't identify the demons
For they hide underneath the skin
Even the soldier of integrity
Denies the cost of sin
Poisened by the plague
This blood once pure
Prayers gone untouched
I reach for the cure
Time is lost
As reality fades away
The pain releases
As my smile decays
A shattered mirror
Scattered to the ground
I leave these words
Where my body will be found
No longer will I stand
Only to fall
No longer will I climb
Only to crawl
I will not close these eyes
Only to suffer a tear
I will not watch the ball drop
To reflect another year
The tension is gone
My mind is rested
I take comfort on the floor
As my last breath is digested
I leave you alone
In hopes you will see
My pain was denied
With this last apology
"You couldn't identify the demons For they hide underneath the skin"
This part kept repeating itself in my mind as I read the whole piece.
"Even the soldier of integrity Denies the cost of sin" This gave a haunting chill that for some reason was comforting.
"The tension is gone My mind is rested I take comfort on the floor As my last breath is digested
I leave you alone In hopes you will see My pain was denied With this last apology"
I think these two stanzas were my favorite throughtout the whole piece. "My pain was denied with this last apology" I think that struck a tender spot with me, something I can relate to well. I like your writting Jessa I think I'll have to divulge in it a little more!
this is a really good peice. i thought the flow and structure of the peice was well thought out and put together. so great job on that. on a personal note i thought that the poem was amazing. and i cannot really say to much about the topic as i have written about the same topic too. one of m y favorite parts though was this "Tears in the form of words Tangled throughout the pages"
"No longer will I stand Only to fall No longer will I climb Only to crawl I will not close these eyes Only to suffer a tear I will not watch the ball drop To reflect another year"
those were just some of the parts that stood out to me. great job keep it up...Joy
i found the previous comment kind of insensitive in some sense, obviously i am sorry you lost your friend, but that doesn't mean you can insult what someone else is feeling. no one should be forced to feel inadequate.
i really enjoyed this poem, and the flow and rhyme scheme is marvelous.
i really liked the line: "Tears in the form of words Tangled throughout the pages"
This was well written. The structure of this poem fit very well with the words. The rhyming was also supurb. Good job, nicely written and keep it up! Ciao.
This would usually get a good comment from me, as I have written many poems about suicide. But my friend Nathan just died, and I think that is very unfair for you to wish your life away, while his was so cruely taken from him. He didn't want to doe, but he did. This really has nothing to do with the structure of your poem, or you. It just saddens me that there are so many people who want to die, and others who don't but the end up dying. I don't know... I am sorry if I offended you in any way. I am just frustrated at seeing the same idea over and over. LeAnna
Submission Name: The Last Apology
