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    dots Submission Name: closing my eyes(sequal:wakinupdots
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    Author: maninthemirror
    ASL Info:    17/m/arkansas
    Elite Ratio:    2.64 - 224/318/109
    Words: 84
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Serious
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    Description:
       this is the sequal to opening my eyes AKA wakin up


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    dotsclosing my eyes(sequal:wakinupdots
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    as I go to sleep at night I lay in silence/
    my depression made anger and so I turned to violence/
    living with what I've done/
    should I run with a gun/
    is it all in good fun/
    or a dangerous run/
    will I find out in the end/
    when I lose all my friends/
    the love never had/
    did I take the wrong path/
    was it truely wrong to get high every day/
    does this mean my life took the wrong way/




    Submitted on 2005-09-26 19:55:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      ur life's determined by the choices u make
    and the risks that u take
    live life for ur sake
    don't let anyone tell u what to do
    cuz jealous mutha fUckas tend to envy u
    just know that ur in command
    light ur blunt and spread ur second hand
    "troy"
    | Posted on 2005-09-27 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
      hell...i think this was good... i think we all take that wrong turn in our lifes...and well...like you and me and some of my friends...and most likely some of yours stayed on that path instead of turning back,...because we enjoyed it... whats so bad about getting high everyday..i mean it might [censored] you up a littke bit but hey you chose the path...its not to late to turn back...but if you like the path your on stay there...fuKk i would..i hate askin for directions...lol!nice poem babe

    XxXSuicidalxxChildXxX
    | Posted on 2005-09-26 00:00:00 | by Suicidalchild51 | [ Reply to This ]


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