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    dots Submission Name: cant help but love itdots

    Author: maninthemirror
    ASL Info:    17/m/arkansas
    Elite Ratio:    2.64 - 224/318/109
    Words: 185
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
    Total Views: 442
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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       Can you really not love this......cause I have to ....this is the shit....at least I THINK so

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    dotscant help but love itdots

    the reason i rap, well it's a complicated thing/
    like asking mr. manson whats the reason for his being/
    can you afford to love me and the shit that I stand for/
    if I didn't rap for money is it me, not you whod bore/
    bore me with all ur pitches of success/
    you wanna be a rapper, fuckin got off house arrest/
    then you come talk to me, and we'll work out something/
    and maybe who knows, you might be and aberrant king/
    untill then leave me the fuck alone/
    work on your lyrics and rap harder than bone/
    so that, when you spit your shit/
    you break the bones of every bitch/
    bust noses, black eyes with rhymes/
    make every word you say not late, but on time/
    run with a group, so when people fuck with you/
    you can laugh, cause they behind you like"what you gonna do"/
    what I'm trying to do is get inside your brain/
    make you realize my life is insane/
    don't fuck with this aberrant, juggalo king/
    unless you want impelled by an electric pole beam/

    Submitted on 2005-09-26 20:31:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      hmm...i liked it...but not LOVED it...it wasnt as good ass some of the shIt Youve posted. idk what it was tho.i think Joe R is a bItch tho..he dont kno what the fUck hes talkin about...he just hasnt seen your work..that makes mne mad...lil fUcker...he should read other stuff b4...

    **kisses and hugs**

    | Posted on 2005-09-27 00:00:00 | by Suicidalchild51 | [ Reply to This ]
      Honestly, I thought this was whack. The lyrics were just whack, there's nothing else to say. You need to work on your rhyme and rhythm. I don't mean to completely diss your rap but I wasn't feelin' it. If this is a battle rap then you need to work on your lines, so that they they'll make people go, "Damn, that was tight!"
    | Posted on 2005-09-27 00:00:00 | by FoxxyRoxxanne | [ Reply to This ]
      that guy called u mate. what the fvck? i have to admit. this one wasn't all that good. i've seen better from you. just keep writing and keep posting. don't let the haters knock ur hustle.
    | Posted on 2005-09-27 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]

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