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    dots Submission Name: Childish Gamesdots
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    Author: Raivn
    ASL Info:    33/f/al
    Elite Ratio:    4.28 - 1222/916/231
    Words: 97
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nostalgia
    Total Views: 607
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 505



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       Reply to a question... What was your favorite thing to do when you were a little kid. I thought I'd post it. I suppose it's a nice change from my regular stuff.


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    dotsChildish Gamesdots
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    When I was young, I played basketball,
    I ran, swam, sang, I did it all.
    I loved to climb up into trees,
    Ride my bike and skin up my knees.
    I played Barbies with my sister,
    Jumped rope till I had blisters,
    Colored in my coloring books,
    I really tried to help my mom cook.
    I had so much fun back then,
    Wish I could do it all again,
    But I found, out of all I could achieve,
    My favorite thing to do was play make-believe.




    Submitted on 2005-09-27 09:40:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      For some reason I think I've read something like this before and I'm thinking you've written something like this before. But o well. I honestly really liked this a lot! I really have no complaints. This was something nice to read. It makes you think of all the days and good times growing up considering the fact it seems like the only bad times we ever had were when we were in trouble and had to get spanked. Haha. But like I said no complaints here. Everything seems perfect as far as rhyming, rhythm, flow and all that goes. I think this just might have to be a favorite too!

    Brenna
    | Posted on 2005-09-27 00:00:00 | by Day DreaMeR | [ Reply to This ]
      This was cute. Reminded me of a nephew of mine who always pretends. The other day I caught him pretending to be in a boxing match with a tree. HA! I like the trip down memory lane you have taken the reader down here. Very sweet. Have a good one and keep smilin'
    | Posted on 2005-09-27 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]


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