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Wishing, Hoping, Praying

Author: mysteryed
ASL Info:    44/male/california/usa
Elite Ratio:    3.29 - 20 /35 /18
Words: 168
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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what can i say, i think one day i will succede.

Wishing, Hoping, Praying

Wishing, Hoping, Praying

I wish so badly that I was dead
Found in a tree hung under head
The tender kiss felt from a rope
Its for this end that I do hope
To end the pain felt day to day
Its for my death that I do pray
So I am wishing, hoping and praying
That from a tree ill soon be swaying
Its not the fear of being dead
Its living life that I do dread
Its living in this hell on earth
To the day I die back to my birth
And all the days in between
Make this life seem so obscene
So when the day does finally come
And to my wish I do succumb
Ill look and find a hopeful tree
Then ill pray on bended knee
Ill climb the tree a limb up high
And to my neck the rope apply
Look around give one last sigh
And when I drop begin to cry

By Mr. E. Jones

Submitted on 2005-09-27 11:12:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  You want a real work of art?
A true statement?
Real depth,rage and beauty?

Don't be a pretender,pull the trigger
because blood spilled across a page
would be more poetic than this
played out drivel.

There is a lot to be said for originality,unfortunately none of it is stated here.
| Posted on 2005-09-27 00:00:00 | by honus | [ Reply to This ]
  Well Mr Jones,
I hope that day will never come to you. Taking your own life is not the way to go. Have you ever once considered the hurt and pain you will cause to other folks? Do not tell me no one cares, because someone does. Sure life have it's ups and downs. You are not the only one who feels as if life is a disappointment. Instead of doing something about. Your write shows you have talent. Apply it! You have to be strong. In your write you mention the word "pray". Prayer is a powerful tool. Let me tell you a short lil story. The past 5 yrs of my life has been a challenge. My mom passed on. 10 relatives passed on within a year. Our house burned to the ground. It took a year to get re-built because we had problems with the contractor. Got sued and counter sued the contractor. I got ill, almost passed. 2 teenage cousins got killed, because of their lifestyles. Son had to have brain surgery. Daughter contracted meningitis (mosquito bite). Elderly father got ill. Here's the ending...Katrina hit and our house had water up to the roof. One of my brothers was missing for 4 days. Don't know when we can go back and re-build . So we are "refugees" as the media calls us. What I'm saying is...with all of this happening/happened I should be shattered to pieces. I'm not. I have faith and I tell myself it will be all right . You have to tell yourself the same thing. Forget about your pass troubles. If you need to vent, PM me. I'll be praying for you, take care...wanda
| Posted on 2005-09-27 00:00:00 | by bigfineq | [ Reply to This ]

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