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    dots Submission Name: Flashdots
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    Author: Epiphany
    ASL Info:    42/F/Universe
    Elite Ratio:    4.38 - 3342/2139/390
    Words: 14
    Class/Type: Haiku/Nature
    Total Views: 699
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    Bytes: 91



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       1-arm bandit weather haiku

    Love,Peace,Joy!!! tif


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    dotsFlashdots
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    Morse Code Lightning Bolt
    Silver flash the sword steel sky
    tear sky open rain




    Submitted on 2005-09-27 14:00:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is what I'm talking about! Perfect, nothing to change. I love it. The first line is so extraordinary, it takes a true writer to come uo with such metaphors!
    | Posted on 2005-10-14 00:00:00 | by PinkFairy | [ Reply to This ]
      The 'morse code lightning bolts' are perfection. I can not think of a more wonderful and seemingly true metaphor for lightning sending out an S.O.S or perhaps a warning to those who dare to gaze upon its beauty.
    | Posted on 2005-09-27 00:00:00 | by Tarwen Nevle | [ Reply to This ]
      Nothing better than to view a good old fashioned storm with bolts of lightening tearing the sky apart. Not sure where Moses's code fits in though.
    | Posted on 2005-09-27 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]
      ooo, i like this one! i could see it, the lightning bolt like a sword through the sky. wonderful little haiku you one-armed bandit you! the rains are coming soon, and here in Washington, they flow for days and days... makes everything so green and lush.
    much love,
    ~Cat
    | Posted on 2005-09-27 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]
      Tiff-
    Well done, nice to see you doing Haikus.
    The last line seemed a little week, perhaps
    "Rain's sky tears open"?
    Just my humble input.
    However you present it, the imagery is there and easy to understand.

    your friend
    ben
    | Posted on 2005-09-27 00:00:00 | by BenCollier | [ Reply to This ]


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