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    dots Submission Name: The Past and Your Presencedots
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    Author: I_Bleed_Ink
    Elite Ratio:    5.56 - 183/176/53
    Words: 121
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       Just some babbling put to paper while I should have been studying...the silence could not consume the yearning in my heart.


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    dotsThe Past and Your Presencedots
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    Alone in my room,
    but not in my heart,
    the silence is roaring
    against the murmur
    of conversations past.

    Leafing through pages,
    unintelligible words compared
    to the clarity or your silence.
    My words enough volume for two,
    but I am not privy to the
    inner whisperings of your soul.

    Secret in your own right,
    yet so connected to my being—
    your presence is astounding,
    and heartily accepted.

    Tongues weighted by thought,
    and still fighting for expression,
    to imagine such a simple word
    could shout volumes of hidden desires;
    could strip you of your cover,
    blind you by divine rapture,
    and still leave you trembling—
    clinging to your former existence.

    Such is the allure of Love…




    Submitted on 2005-09-27 20:25:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Oh the yearning! Yes, I think you captured it here quite well.

    And I really have nothing else to say, I'm afraid.

    Peace,
    Jase
    | Posted on 2005-10-10 00:00:00 | by alteredlife | [ Reply to This ]


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