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    dots Submission Name: Lost But Never Forgotten V1dots
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    Author: Suicidalchild51
    ASL Info:    15/f/wa
    Elite Ratio:    3.19 - 402/332/83
    Words: 157
    Class/Type: Lyrics/
    Total Views: 247
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1001



    Description:
       This is for all those who we have lost in our lives...remeber them...never forget...or they will forget about you...


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    dotsLost But Never Forgotten V1dots
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    We sit thre, like two peas in a pod,
    Then you got up, and walked infront of that car,
    I knew you had been going through some shit,
    But i didnt know this was how you were gonna deal with it.

    I got up ran next to your broken body,
    The woman took one look then started runnin,
    What a lifeless bitch,
    I can barly stomach it.

    (((Chorus)))
    Though your gone,
    But never forgotten,
    Ill hold your palm,
    Even after the heart is stoppin,
    Youll never be forgotten.

    I look into your eyes,
    And then upon your wrists,
    It had to hurt real bad,
    For him to go like this,
    So i stomp my fists,
    Look at the sky
    The rain pores down,
    As i tryed not to cry.

    (((Chorus)))
    Though your gone,
    But never forgotten,
    Ill hold your palm,
    Even after the heart is stoppin,
    Youll never be forgotten.





    Submitted on 2005-09-27 21:38:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I think that you are too young to be able to write about these feelings much less know them! and you have done a great job showing your confusion for the situation and the love for the one lost. i'm sorry that you have to know these feelings. keep putting them in words for others to know and to release your feelings. it's not good to keep them all up inside. i will read the next. this one needs no improvement except spelling!~~tracy
    | Posted on 2005-11-07 00:00:00 | by tmullins | [ Reply to This ]
      dammit. i liked this one and all but i couldn't tell what kinda song it is. is it a short rap or like a rock song. i dunno. tell me when u get this. i still gotta read the next one. were these real people that u knew? if so, that sux azz.
    | Posted on 2005-10-12 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
      haha u stole a line from soemthing of mine man i feel fricken special cuz this shIt is good i mean i really liked it and it had a good point but it didnt have a great rythem...good write lm looking forward to the next one...luvs ya...
    **KeLLy**
    | Posted on 2005-09-28 00:00:00 | by bleedinbabygrl8 | [ Reply to This ]
      tried not tryed
    you stomp feet not fists.
    sorry, that sounds like i'm trying to be a smartass.
    this was clear but i couldn't find a musical flow, but you have something, right?
    it could have gone more into what you felt at the loss but it was good.
    | Posted on 2005-09-27 00:00:00 | by fabulousAMY | [ Reply to This ]



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