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    dots Submission Name: Lost But Never Forgotten V2dots
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    Author: Suicidalchild51
    ASL Info:    15/f/wa
    Elite Ratio:    3.19 - 402/332/83
    Words: 192
    Class/Type: Lyrics/
    Total Views: 247
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    Description:
       this is the second verse to Lost but never forgotten V1


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    dotsLost But Never Forgotten V2dots
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    My life came crasing down,
    I picked up your body off the ground,
    And pulled it onto the lawn,
    People saw and called the ambulance 911.
    When they arrived i still cried,
    And still took hold of your hand,
    Ill never let go,
    Just to show,
    That your always my best friend.

    (((Chorus)))
    Though your gone,
    But never forgotten,
    Ill hold your palm,
    Even after the heart is stoppin,
    Youll never be forgotten.

    In the ambulance i looked at you,
    and thought to myself.. why?
    It wasnt your time to go,
    Wasnt your time to die.
    We got into the ER,
    His mother already there,
    I looked over,
    And all she did was stare.
    About 10 20 minutes later,
    The doctor came and said,
    Sorry Mrs, but your son has been pronoced Dead.
    She screamed andcried
    As i died inside,
    i didnt know what to say
    So i walked home in the rain and dark
    Just letting you know youll stay,
    in my heart...

    (((Chorus)))
    Though your gone,
    But never forgotten,
    Ill hold your palm,
    Even after the heart is stoppin,
    Youll never be forgotten.







    Submitted on 2005-09-27 21:48:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I feel pain like you do. Someone extremely close to me commited suicide 3 days after my birthday last year. I loved him, he was my bf and he loved me. At the time he was struggling with depression and drugs and it became too much...
    Anyways this is the part i really liked and could relate to:
    "She screamed and cried
    As i died inside,
    i didnt know what to say
    So i walked home in the rain and dark
    Just letting you know youll stay,
    in my heart..."
    Please read some of my poetry and comment on it.
    thx
    Reeses
    | Posted on 2005-11-15 00:00:00 | by Numb | [ Reply to This ]
      this is great. i think you have done a wonderful job again with the true feelings and such, you make us all feel the loss. that's what makes you a good writer. keep it up!~~tracy
    | Posted on 2005-11-07 00:00:00 | by tmullins | [ Reply to This ]
      yeah this one is much better than the first even though they're both pretty good. i agree with kelly, this is gonna be a fave in my list too. i like the last part:
    So i walked home in the rain and dark
    Just letting you know youll stay,
    in my heart...

    peace and happiness babes
    "troy"
    | Posted on 2005-10-12 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
      damn..this one brought a little more thought to my heart and mind i really liked it and it remineded me of some of the stuff that i had been through yet agian i love the tiitle and it means alot to me because it has alot of character..i love it this one is going into the favorites..it had a better ryhme..luv ya...
    **KeLLy**
    | Posted on 2005-09-28 00:00:00 | by bleedinbabygrl8 | [ Reply to This ]
      I am sorry about your loss (if you are talking about yourself), that must be very hard. i like the idea about the universal greatness of holding hands, any kind of hand as long as the love is there. So, well done.

    shalini
    | Posted on 2005-09-27 00:00:00 | by sbridges | [ Reply to This ]



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