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    dots Submission Name: The babysitter Part 2dots
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    Author: Drea
    ASL Info:    18/f/nowhere
    Elite Ratio:    3.79 - 289/142/53
    Words: 89
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       Okay this is the last one... It's only a two part series. Thanx Josy.


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    dotsThe babysitter Part 2dots
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    She keeps going straight
    Then hangs a left
    She said fuck the police
    She'll find me herself

    She said when she finds me
    She'll beat my ass
    She'll get me for
    throwing her kids in the trash

    Oh shit here she comes
    around the corner up the street
    couple more steps
    she'll be face to face with me

    Uh-Oh I think
    I shoud run
    Shit too late
    She's comin with her gun...








    Submitted on 2005-09-28 06:26:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This should be in the novel section not poetry or whatever this is lol just playin'.

    I think this is a mix of comedy and suspense

    good write and keep on going
    | Posted on 2005-09-28 00:00:00 | by poet09 | [ Reply to This ]


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