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    dots Submission Name: Dark Lightdots

    Author: Chicool2
    ASL Info:    17/f/Pennsylvania
    Elite Ratio:    4.02 - 266/260/60
    Words: 106
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 781
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       My comeback from the past 4 months. I tried. What do you think?

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    dotsDark Lightdots

    The desolation between dark and light
    Love and hate
    Sweet and tart
    Are all the same from the eyes.

    You never knew the pain
    And anxiety of the anticipation
    Growing ever more.

    A kiss that opened my world
    Let me to show passion
    Led me to temptation.

    But somehow
    I was led away
    That kiss was simply a kiss
    And the passion is never more.

    I've passed you several times
    Small talk is all that is left.
    Help me to love again?
    Show me how to open up?

    Are you willing to change your ways...?

    Submitted on 2005-09-28 07:08:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is a good write where you definately express the hurt that was dealt to you very well
    I hope you can realise you learned mant lessons from this relationship which you can use to make the next relationship perfect
    God Bless
    Your Friend
    | Posted on 2006-01-24 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      I'm going to take a guess here, but did this someone cheat on you or something? You left them because of that and they want to be back with you. Only guessing! You don't have to tell me if you don't want me to.
    Well anyways about the poem. It was good, but the flow could have gone a little better, but what am I saying I'm only a 14 year old revolutionary writer. I'm a rebel. It was good, but not to full of emotions. BUt it got your feelings across pretty well.
    | Posted on 2005-09-28 00:00:00 | by akaietowa-ru_18 | [ Reply to This ]

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