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    dots Submission Name: Meltdots

    Author: Epiphany
    ASL Info:    42/F/Universe
    Elite Ratio:    4.38 - 3342/2139/390
    Words: 12
    Class/Type: Haiku/Nature
    Total Views: 525
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 78

       I'm trying haikus because it's less writing/typing for my lame hand.

    Love,Peace,Joy!!! tif

    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.


    Melt me horizon
    Golden Amber Lighted Sun
    Night coming ~ Day done

    Submitted on 2005-09-28 11:50:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is most definitely a wonderful haiku. You have the perfect form and the nature and I must say, just lovely word choices. Your words just give me this spectacular vision of a beautiful sunset and its color display is just melting the sky as it sinks into the ocean. (I love to view the sunsets from the ocean) Lovely imagery and descriptions here. Great job. Take care.

    | Posted on 2005-11-17 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]
      I never though a haiku could be that good. I have only written them for school. You pictured the sunset nicely.
    Much Love
    | Posted on 2005-10-14 00:00:00 | by PinkFairy | [ Reply to This ]
      Yeah, Tiff, this is what haiky really means, to paint a story of the beauty of nature that is a panorama in the reader's mind.

    And all in seventeen syllables!

    Very nice indeed

    be Happy

    | Posted on 2005-10-03 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]
      Five-stars for this one Tiff.
    So much beauty in so few words.
    "Golden Amber Lighted Sun" < - just lovely!

    I see a gorgeous sunset in this picture... melting into the night.

    Simply wonderful. The best haiku I've read yet... including my own

    | Posted on 2005-10-01 00:00:00 | by Intricate1 | [ Reply to This ]
      Yes I agree very good. Almost like you painted a picture with the words. So kool. I do like reading about nature. DId you read Franks Little Bird? That is another one that is so Kool.
    Look forward to reading more of your work.
    God Bless
    | Posted on 2005-09-28 00:00:00 | by Poetic Cure | [ Reply to This ]
      Very descriptive and full of vivid imagery. A picture painted with eleven little words - that is quite an achievement lady !
    | Posted on 2005-09-28 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]
      It is an achievement to be able to fit such imagery, mood, and description into three short lines. I am not experienced in the writing of Haiku, so I may not be the best critic. However, I responded positively to this. You should develop this original style you have to achieve advanced accomplishments.
    | Posted on 2005-09-28 00:00:00 | by Natalia Murray | [ Reply to This ]

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