Description: Its about time I write about something different than just dark writtings huh? Big hole I was in was basically caused by something wrong with my systems... but yeah back on track I think... you be the judge
very good! i like it! this is wat happens when ur heart is broken eitheir u want revenge or u want them back! u try to make it seem like ur not missing them but ur heart continues to break. nice job! love it! ~akaila evonne~
I always say I hate "love & longing" poems, but I think somewhere deep inside I actually love them because nothing shows emotion more than these kind of poems...and this piece is a very nicely written one that works well for me...I enjoyed it very much
...I read this before. Why did I not comment? Ooo I'm really starting to lose it. Well...I'll just do it now
I love this. From the first line I knew I would like it, and I really did. The way you express things is amazing. I don't even have a favorite part because I love every word. It made me kind of sad though. I guess it's because I can relate. Well, if there's one thing going good for you now, it's your writing. Very beautifully done. Good luck with everything. Great job
Probably painful eh? I'm sorry man...love really does hurt and just to let you know there are upsides to it...I mean look it has already inspired this really awesome poetry in you and you can build yourself from it and shape your emotions and eventually you will be free and refreshed and completely ready to start over...the pain sucks but it is necessary to heal...
It is simple..and it does get your point across..i can also realte to this really well...some of the ryhme doesnt sit too well for me...but as long as it says everything you want it to...then thats the main thing...stormy
really simple. yet the feelings are so real. i can relate to this well, so this really rung out to me.
you did a good job on keeping it simple yet still powerful. ususal those are the best. where its just your feelings speaking for themselves. thats alot of what i saw here.
silent tears, thats a really interesting subject for a guy, it shows a different side i guess. most guys are seen as the ones that are tough, the ones that make us cry, and seeing it the other way around really opens your eyes to more. i really liked that. it shows you things that you really wouldnt see, thank you for the read. I enjoyed it very much. ~jennifer