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    dots Submission Name: the ability to feeldots
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    Author: andnow
    ASL Info:    19.f.wa
    Elite Ratio:    3.57 - 136/135/42
    Words: 83
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 237
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 568



    Description:
       i kinda went off a million tangents


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    With the first few strikes of a chord,
    and that old familiar feeling rises,
    that lump in the back of your throat.
    Its sealing, and mending,
    and healing old wounds.
    Learning to appreciate
    the simple ability to feel.

    All of your time spent,
    treading the road less traveled,
    though it may be bitter and brutal,
    will lead you to the contented outcome.

    Awaking from a 1000 year sleep,
    melting the ice surrounding your soul.
    You’ve bloomed a beautiful flower.




    Submitted on 2005-09-28 22:17:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      a lot of singularily good ideas wrapped together.

    in the same way that a buch of good foods mixed together doesn't make one massive good food, a bunch of good ideas together doesn't make one massive good poem.

    it's very fragmented.

    very tangential.

    tangents can kill a poem.

    this one, unfortunately, i think to be unsalvagable.

    however, the ideas are in your head.

    apply them wisely in the future, and you can have many good poems.

    instead of one big ugly one :)

    keep at it.

    experimentation is good for you.
    | Posted on 2006-03-20 00:00:00 | by Sheakhan | [ Reply to This ]



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