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    dots Submission Name: Deaddots

    Author: Drea
    ASL Info:    18/f/nowhere
    Elite Ratio:    3.79 - 289/142/53
    Words: 60
    Class/Type: Poetry/Being a Teen
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       I wrote this yesterday when I was all bumbed out and w/e. I was moody, plus Chad pissed me off.

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    Im slowely losing everything
    My personality drips out
    bit by bit
    My sanity leeks a little everyday
    My tears are no more
    For I have lost the will to cry
    My life is slowely fading away
    Right before my eyes
    But I feel no pain
    Becaus in the battle for my Soul
    I lost my heart.

    Submitted on 2005-09-29 04:10:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I really like this. It really tells how I'm feeling at this very moment. I love the flow and feeling of it. Great Job.

    | Posted on 2006-02-02 00:00:00 | by clandestine | [ Reply to This ]
      In the battle for my soul i lost my heart...

    I like this part of the poem, very poignant.

    when you say you were bummed out and w/e...what does the w/e mean?

    | Posted on 2005-12-24 00:00:00 | by Senna27NZ | [ Reply to This ]
      It is really a deep felt emotins and i guess its true.Its really good.Each line makes you go deeper and deeper into the poem. Its really awesome.
    | Posted on 2005-11-16 00:00:00 | by anonymous69 | [ Reply to This ]
      I think this is trully trully deep... I have felt like this before like I am losing myself to a battle between myself and my feelings and everything around me... It is really sad when you start feeling like that beacuse nothing seems to matter anymore and I mean nothing not just things relating to the battle but every thing in your mind is being lost little by little to the point you just do not care about anything that happens or anyone that comes by... Hope this goes by fast beacuse it is not good to have this mind frame for long periods of time

    Jose J. Ortiz aka Josyman
    | Posted on 2005-10-01 00:00:00 | by josymanthegreat | [ Reply to This ]
      i love the last two lines "in the battle for my soul i lost my heart" beautiful. the only thing i would change is leaks is spelled wrong... great work
    | Posted on 2005-09-29 00:00:00 | by EEKS | [ Reply to This ]
      I think this really true and deep. Usually it's really hard to write down exactly what you're feeling...and have others understand, but you did it. Cheers! I say it's good...and probably more people sympathize with you than you think.

    | Posted on 2005-09-29 00:00:00 | by Persephone | [ Reply to This ]

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