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    dots Submission Name: Written: March 3rd 2003dots
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    Author: myonlysalvation
    Elite Ratio:    2.11 - 41/48/42
    Words: 514
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       this is an old poem i wrote in 2003.


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    dotsWritten: March 3rd 2003dots
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    :don't mean what i say- when i get so mean* iloveu



    well here it is again....every penny spent
    I move in ways that aren't allowed
    around you **
    I fall through every crack still holding onto
    you- well did you hear the news this time?
    "did you hear what they really said?"
    i died alone a long time ago- i drownd in my own
    demise-
    I've got the taste of my own blood
    my skin is bruised & torn- I finally come undone;
    I became friends w the enemy
    I kiss the dead & their feet-
    I run for cover at the sound of my own gun...
    I've withered & Burned, I've finally given up
    I've heard the lies
    They slither beneath my door at night
    They keep me up & waiting......
    ready to fight-
    (& i did) I've heard the news " what they really said"
    That you cared alot about her
    her souL was dead

    you've got the taste of her blood
    this time, shes really gone for for good*
    you run for cover at the sound of her voice

    .you finally have come undone.
    well do you believe in lies?
    do you believe in recovery?
    do you believe in me?......
    you walk the streets alone at night at the shadows of her dreams *

    you've burned in the *death* of her fire.
    she gave you up at the drop of a dime
    i gave you up * igave you in

    i really let you you down this time
    I let you all choke in the shallowness of all my lies-

    (im.sorry. so sorry. to have let it waste & die)




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